Captain Harlock Episode 22 QC1 report retrograde inversion * Standardize "My friend" vs. "My Friend" caps 07:24 My Friend, 10:32 My Friend, 10:45 my friend, (suggest My Friend) 14:29 My friend! (suggest My Friend!) 16:16 My friend (not sure if this should be cap'd) 02:42 Lead-in is too early "Captain Harlock now returns to Deathshadow Island," And I would have the sub change to the next line at 02:46, not at 02:49. The next line is longer and may require more time for it to be read. 03:05 Lead-in is too early "This is Deathshadow Island?" 03:12 split is way late "Ano dou deshou ne" = "What do you think?" "Oyoide [etc]" = "We could go swimming" 04:51 => Alright. Begin. - I hear the anti-semicolon committee rearing its ugly head in....... dun dun dun duuuuunnnnnn 05:28 => W-What's this? - and time in the stutter 05:34 Lead-in is slightly late "The great caravan of the space fleet, [...]" 05:49 Lead-in is late "This is a small part?" 06:52 Lead-in is too early "Plant a pennant" Suggest => Plant on Mars a pennant of the type planted upon the Earth, 07:03 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 07:17 Beware the lights, it's a TRAP... 09:14 => The combination of the Earth pennant and the one on Mars has created a powerful guidewave. read: "The combination has" 09:40 => There's a vestigial reaction on the time radar. vestigal -> vestigial - there was an i missing 10:03 Lead-in is too early "Let's go to meet the Mazone fleet." (listen for "ikuzo" - that's where it starts) 12:22 not "The Arcadia"? [I know Harlock says just "Arcadia" and not "the Arcadia", not sure about narr] 12:54 Lead-in is late "What /is/ that?" 14:04 => Give 'em all we've got! an apostrophe before "em" would be nice. ...Actually that line is too long for the duration of "ikuze." How about just => Let's go! 14:19 => Twenty-two minutes, thirty-two seconds to the planet's surface. - note hyphens in "twenty-two", "thirty-two" - also the sub change is late by 1 word - "juuryoku" is where "Gravity is 1200 times greater[etc]" should lead in 16:24 => and now we've fallen onto the real Deathshadow. - without the "and" it is a run-on. :| 17:24 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 17:44 => Forty-eight hours later, with nothing to be done and nothing to see, - "nothing to be done nor anything to see" lacks some parallelism :\ 20:01 Lead-in is too early "The Mazone fleet is closing in rapidly." 20:47 => Mazone fast response fleet approaching, twenty-three degrees to starboard. - degress -> degrees 22:22 => Our splended warships of the fast response fleet are completely destroyed. - Out -> Our 22:33 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 22:35 => The question of whether the Mazone live or die is dependent on Harlock's defeat! - dependant -> dependent 22:41 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 24:16 => and for reasons unknown, the Mazone challenge him to a plastic model building contest. - uknown -> unknown - contest of plastic model building -> plastic model building contest Captain Harlock Episode 22 QC1 report retrograde inversion * Standardize "My friend" vs. "My Friend" caps 07:24 My Friend, 10:32 My Friend, 10:45 my friend, (suggest My Friend) 14:29 My friend! (suggest My Friend!) 16:16 My friend (not sure if this should be cap'd) 02:42 Lead-in is too early "Captain Harlock now returns to Deathshadow Island," And I would have the sub change to the next line at 02:46, not at 02:49. The next line is longer and may require more time for it to be read. 03:05 Lead-in is too early "This is Deathshadow Island?" 03:12 split is way late "Ano dou deshou ne" = "What do you think?" "Oyoide [etc]" = "We could go swimming" 04:51 => Alright. Begin. - I hear the anti-semicolon committee rearing its ugly head in....... dun dun dun duuuuunnnnnn 05:28 => W-What's this? - and time in the stutter 05:34 Lead-in is slightly late "The great caravan of the space fleet, [...]" 05:49 Lead-in is late "This is a small part?" 06:52 Lead-in is too early "Plant a pennant" Suggest => Plant on Mars a pennant of the type planted upon the Earth, 07:03 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 07:17 Beware the lights, it's a TRAP... 09:14 => The combination of the Earth pennant and the one on Mars has created a powerful guidewave. read: "The combination has" 09:40 => There's a vestigial reaction on the time radar. vestigal -> vestigial - there was an i missing 10:03 Lead-in is too early "Let's go to meet the Mazone fleet." (listen for "ikuzo" - that's where it starts) 12:22 not "The Arcadia"? [I know Harlock says just "Arcadia" and not "the Arcadia", not sure about narr] 12:54 Lead-in is late "What /is/ that?" 14:04 => Give 'em all we've got! an apostrophe before "em" would be nice. ...Actually that line is too long for the duration of "ikuze." How about just => Let's go! 14:19 => Twenty-two minutes, thirty-two seconds to the planet's surface. - note hyphens in "twenty-two", "thirty-two" - also the sub change is late by 1 word - "juuryoku" is where "Gravity is 1200 times greater[etc]" should lead in 16:24 => and now we've fallen onto the real Deathshadow. - without the "and" it is a run-on. :| 17:24 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 17:44 => Forty-eight hours later, with nothing to be done and nothing to see, - "nothing to be done nor anything to see" lacks some parallelism :\ 20:01 Lead-in is too early "The Mazone fleet is closing in rapidly." 20:47 => Mazone fast response fleet approaching, twenty-three degrees to starboard. - degress -> degrees 22:22 => Our splended warships of the fast response fleet are completely destroyed. - Out -> Our 22:33 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 22:35 => The question of whether the Mazone live or die is dependent on Harlock's defeat! - dependant -> dependent 22:41 => Yes ma'am! - decap "ma'am", we're not capping "sir" 24:16 => and for reasons unknown, the Mazone challenge him to a plastic model building contest. - uknown -> unknown - contest of plastic model building -> plastic model building contest